Welcome to the start of a new trimester. Everybody starts with a clean slate. You will be expected to continue to apply your reading, writing, and grammar skills from the first trimester into your work in addition to the new skills we will learn this trimester. This means my expectations increase a little! Who's ready for the new challenge?
We hit the ground running with a short review of:
These will be tested on Monday 8th November. Watch out for Noun practice on the blog early next week.
We will also begin our tour of the different regions of the U.S. beginning with the Southeast.
Don't forget that you descriptive piece is due Tuesday.
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Thank you for telling us!!! Will we do any review on this in school. I am ready to learn new skills!!!!!!!!!!
thank you for telling us!!!!!!!!!! i will be sure to come in on monday ready to learn!!!!!!!!!!!!
sounds great Liza and Martha. +1 for your enthusiasm!
Does this sound okay mr. buxton i took out the you and other than that i didnt do much although i added phrases ~~~~~~Crisp fall leaves flutter down laying upon the hard, cold, gray, gravel. To be with my family on a cold winter day, sights of enormous mountains would be trailing behind everyone’s footprint since it is the Smoky Mountains. Standing beside my blue plaid shirt, Mom, Katie and Sarah walk onward. As every single little footprint engraves into darkest of dirt, amazing feelings flows inside my thoughts. Meanwhile, steps I take along the trail make me feel closer to our destination, yet still quite far away. About the ground and beside the plants, newly layered stones accompanied relatives of mine although the enormous, sparkling, clear less sky follows above us all. Massive round boulders on the right, and tall knobbed trees on the left, towered around us while opposite of the sights, my siblings extracted frequent unhurried steps. Birds chirped to graceful sounds of music we could just lay hold of, and in addition large black yellow butterflies flapped through the crisp breeze. Go on.. Go on… so far it seems as if the evergreens swept those words onto my families’ bone-chilling faces, despite we were warm inside. Standing on the trail, it curved around like a dark cave away in the jungle. Fragrant smells of yellow dandelions and sharp grass pointing like swords, roamed around us as we took the aroma into our mouths with each of our swift breaths. To just stand in the beautiful woods, leaves whistled around everyone, yet nevertheless forming a feeling of warmth inside owing to the fact we chatted away. Glancing upwards, Mom, Katie, and Sarah stood on every side of me, constructing my evening to be even better in addition to every important statement blooming out of their tranquil, soft-spoken mouths. Beside the fact that i was cringing because of the cold air i also felt wonderful. Strolling downward the infinite trail escorted with my Nike tennis shoes I could detect everything to scratchy bumpy gray gravel, and dewy plants rustling beneath my feet. During this moment in time, audible squeaks of squirrels were just made out to scared of showing their warm fuzzy faces. Farther through the trail together we walked, shoulder- to- shoulder, arm-by-arm. Finally we get to the end of our hike with the wind whispering done… done… done…. Looking up at each sister of mine, a feeling of joy filled inside me because I knew an amazing family would always be there beside me.
I have the same question as Liza. Are we going to do any review on this in school?
no comma when you are using ABC technique after last adjective before noun (1st sentence)
to be with my family...sentence... does not flow - too many clauses
'my blue plaid shirt' it reads like you skirt is a person
feelings flows inside my
thoughts???
stones accompanied relatives of mine ???
my siblings extracted frequent unhurried steps???
The above are just some of the phrases that really don't flow...
Try 'drawing' each sentence EXACTLY as you describe it...Maybe this will help you see what I mean
It needs work...up for the challenge?
Yes Lilly - we haven't even started to look at them yet. Within 3 days you'll be comfortable on these topics.
thank you Mr. Buxton!
how long does are paper on our pictures have to be?
martha wright i think it has to be about 3/4 of the paper when typed.
Mr. buxton after you telling me the phrases didnt flow i wasnt sure if you meant just the way they fit in the paper or the words i used but i thought you probaly meant the 2 one i thought so i changed the words a bit to make it better hope this is okay!~Crisp fall leaves flutter down laying upon the hard, cold, gray gravel. Behind my family sights of enormous mountains trailed behind every one's footprint since it is the Smoky Mountains. Standing beside my me and my blue shirt, Mom, Katie and Sarah walk onward. As every single little footprint engraves into darkest of dirt, amazing feelings winde through my body. Meanwhile, steps I take along the trail make me feel closer to our destination, yet still quite far away. About the ground and beside the plants, the sound of crunching newly layered stones accompanied relatives of mine although the enormous, sparkling, clear less sky follows above us all. Massive round boulders on the right, and tall knobbed trees on the left, towered around us while opposite of the sights, my siblings extract frequent unhurried steps. Birds chirped to graceful sounds of music we could just lay hold of, and in addition large black yellow butterflies flapped through the crisp breeze. Go on.. Go on… so far it seems as if the evergreens swept those words onto my families’ bone-chilling faces, despite we were warm inside. Standing on the trail, it curved around like a dark cave away in the jungle. Fragrant smells of yellow dandelions and sharp grass pointing like swords, roamed around us as we took the aroma into our mouths with each of our swift breaths. To just stand in the beautiful woods, leaves whistled around everyone, yet nevertheless forming a feeling of warmth inside owing to the fact we chatted away. Glancing upwards, Mom, Katie, and Sarah stood on every side of me, constructing my evening to be even better in addition to every important statement blooming out of their tranquil, soft-spoken mouths. Beside the fact that i was cringing because of the cold air i also felt wonderful. Strolling downward the infinite trail escorted with my Nike tennis shoes I could detect everything to scratchy bumpy gray gravel, and dewy plants rustling beneath my feet. During this moment in time, audible squeaks of squirrels were just made out to scared of showing their warm fuzzy faces. Farther through the trail together we walked, shoulder- to- shoulder, arm-by-arm. Finally we get to the end of our hike with the wind whispering done… done… done…. Looking up at each sister of mine, a feeling of joy filled inside me because I knew an amazing family would always be there beside me.
Thank you Mr.Buxton!!!!
Bekah...
much better...
you still nedd to look at some of your comma usage and avoid words that are followed with ... (you need to choose actual words that describe what you want to explain instead of using the ...) e.g. the beauty of the forest ahead was the only invitation we needed to proceed along the path...
there still a few sentences that wouldn't make sense if you drew them specifically ..you are on approx. A- now...
Bravo for your perseverance!
Everybody, I hope you are all reading this advice. The purpose is that you try and see how my advice to Bekah can help you with your own piece!!!
When I first went to see my new dog..........
is that a good start to my descriptive writing
im having trouble with the beginning....
Eliza
Her is another:
The sun seeping through the treesmade her feel as though the she was in an amazing dream.
(i dont like the ending to that one)
which one is better?
Eliza
The beginning is in my two other comments above,
The sounds of birds in the trees welcome me into the morning. Rich evergreen scents fill my head with a trance of this perfect day. As my feet slide across the rough gravel, the rocks poke holes in my old sneakers. As I pick up one of the dogs its fur comforts me. Seeing the cutest dogs ever, made my heart pound with excitement. I couldn't believe one of these would be mine!!!! Laughing, I fall to the floor while the Lakeland Terriers jump all around playfully. The dew of the morning fills my nose with a bright feeling. The golden, black, ad tan dogs run around as a pernament mark of joy feels as though its being written on her forehead with a black sharpy. The warm July day could not have been better. Looking around one little dog catches my eye. Like a magnet, the dog attracts me because of his funny tail and cute underbite.
I need a lot of work!!!!!!!!
Right now I'm thinking of how to describe the the puppy nursery. Plus I need to make it 2 times longer.
ElizA
Thanks a lot Mr. Buxton! You are helping me lots!
Mr Buxton when you said dont use the do you mean to take the /the/ out and use descripitve instead because i tried it and it some places it works; in others it doesnt
also Mr. Buxton can you give me an example of where my comma usage is messed up although it doesnt have to be an example in my piece just explain to me whats wrong!
Mr. Buxton, while reviewing some of the types of nouns today, I came across a good site EZschool.com that has some good practice questions on different types of nouns. I thought it would be helpful to share it with others, for studying for the test .
Eliza- You need some proper nouns to say where you are/ breed of dogs etc
Two back-to-back sentences begin with As...
you need to try and start some sentences with your phrases, infinitive, preposition and participle
2nd opening is better... begin by describing the time of day, weather and where and why you are in a specific place. Describe what you can physical see and hear as you first step into the store. What thoughts are going threough your mind. What smells bombard you? etc etc...
You are actually on the rght track. Your ideas seem to jump around a bit. Draw one sentence at a time .. .to see where you are jumping around.
Bekah - i meant 'the' starts too many sentences back to back.
Look at every comma - if you don't know EXACTLY the grammar reason why it is there , then it probably shouldn't be. Check your phrases that begin sentences - do you have commas t the end of each phrase?
Thanks Gauruv- post the link.
Mr. Buxton i went through my piece of writing and there isnt 1 sentence that starts with the
bekah was i was referring to was not the 'the' but the '...' (the three dots)
MrBuxton,this is the site
http://www.ezschool.com/EZSheets/Grammar/Nouns/index.html
Mr. Buxton, the prase of the week means "there is more in you."
Different topic but our science project is due on Tuesday, Right?
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