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Why was there no blogger of the week?
Because Maddy... Mr.Buxton said there was no-one that really updated stuff as much....
25 SCHOOL DAYS LEFT!!!! :)
there is less actualy. at least that is what i counted.
Yeah!!! My brother got elected for student council president!
I love that quote in the video - "I am a deeply superficial man."
My book club - please go to the spider scribe. What is our grand converstation topic?
I thought we were going to go with George's point about the mom making a unnecessary decision to tell stories about Venice to Prosper and Bo.
Right. thank you.
OH MY GOODNESS! I DON'T WANT 5TH GRADE TO END EVEN THOUGH I AM LOOKING FORWARD TO 6TH GRADE!!! (COMPLEX SENTENCE!!!)
at the art exhibit, i saw paintings that were in my house!
maya and maddy- for book clubs what parts was i supposed to do? i thought i was supposed to do 2 people for nuanced characters and archetypes.
Caroline- That's so cool!
Mr.Buxton- Does the spacing for the fantasy writing really have to be 1.5???
Could it be 1.0???
Carter - Just THINK about your job. We haven't decided everything we need to so that we can start the actual project. Just don't worry...
so..... Can the line spacing be 1.0?
no han
This is my finished story please comment! :):):)
Chapter: 1
On a scorching hot summer morning an unusual smell of sulfur blew right past Kurter’s nose but Kurter ignored it as he was watching his favorite show Terrance and Phillip with his dad. Whom he had cherished and admired for many years he would never leave his father's side, and he didn’t have anyone around all the time he was an only child living an ok life with his parents but his life is about to change.
Suddenly out of the blue paratroopers parachuted down from the sky and disturbed this wonderful morning, World war 3 had started. The paratroopers were approaching their house when Kurter heard a scream come from upstairs.
“Greg go outside and see what those people want!”
ohhh it was Kurter’s mom Lisa, Greg Kurter’s dad approached the paratroopers outside slowly
“Yesss...what do you want”
but he didn’t get a response he only got arrested and taken away by the paratroopers, probably to a reeducation camp but Kurter did not know. Kurter groaned with sadness “could this day get any worse!”
Kurter ran up the cracked wooden stairs and shouted
“Nooooooo, mom dad got arrested and there are paratroopers shooting at our house!”
“What, lets get out of here, hop in the car and we will drive out to the mountain let’s gooo!”
Kurter and his mom scrambled for the car frantically with gunshots blaring in their ears. When they reached the black Hummer they drove off as fast as they could and headed for the convenience store first, then they would head for the mountains where they would
spend their time putting together a rebellion and camp. well that’s until the war is over and hey you know the mighty God Scrap lives under the mountain.
Chapter 2: Convenient God
Kurter and his mom drove towards the towns convenient store to get supplies and guns. When they pulled up front the store clerk came outside to greet them.
“Hurry take all that you can and take some guns before that chinese god Lakitu comes and bombs this place like all the others!”
“Wait, what chinese god?”
“Don’t ask just take!”
Kurter and Lisa entered the store and felt the cool breeze on their face and took it in as if they have never felt cool air before.Hypnotized by the breeze they quickly snapped out of confusion and grabbed everything they could. Just as they were about to finish the store clerk said “oh no there he is, you guys better get out of here as your wanted by all the chinese”
The chinese god was slowly floating towards the store. Kurter and Lisa screamed with fear and scrambled for the car.
“Lets go” Kurter exclaimed.
Kurter and his mom hoped in the car and tried to drive away from the chinese god, but the god didn’t want the store it wanted them!
Chapter 3: Hill
Now it was a high speed chase with the chinese god right on their tail. The chinese god fired missiles at them, but Lisa quickly dodged them with her mad driving skills. Kurter screamed with amazement “Mom how..... did you do that”
Kurters mom responded “Oh well its nothing”
Finally when they reached the mountain covered by green Lakitu stopped following them. They decided to set up camp and explore their surroundings and noticed they were safe, but probably not for long.
Chapter 4: Camp or town?
Kurter could see the horror in his mom’s face as the city engulfed in flames from all the bombs the chinese deployed. Kurter told his mom that it would eventually stop but aparently his mom didn’t like the subject and changed it straight away.
“Kurter we need to go into town and recruit some people and see what's going on”
“But mom will we see dad again?”
“we will check in town, but don’t be scared now grab that gun and head down to the city i’m right behind you”
It was a sad long walk, but what caught their eye was amazing it was a gateway under the mountain. In big letters it said ,“SCRAPS PALACE HIDEOUT.”
“Mom what is that” Kurter exclaimed
“I don’t know but we will check it out on our way back finding out what happened is more important”
When they reached the city there were patrols posted everywhere(and the fire was out) so they had to get rid of their guns. There were also posters posted everywhere but most were in chinese but one poster said:
”We are here to help,” and, “Speaking english is not permitted, you can only speak chinese or else you will be imprisoned or fined from $800-$1,250, thanks for your cooperation!”
“WOW!” Kurter exclaimed.
“Kurter we’d better head to parkers store and see what's going on”
“Ni-hao Lisa” Parker jested
“WHAT!”
“shhh.... Lisa we better not be seen speaking english, so....... what do you want?”
“Fill me in on what’s happening!”
“Fine but listen carefully, the Chinese are looking for you guys and don’t listen to that poster stuff be careful!”
“That’s scary and I will but before we-”
She was interrupted by the soldier on guard.
“What you doing la?”
Parker filled in for lisa
“Ni-hao lieutenant Lee”
Unfortunately for Lisa and Kurter they did not understand the rest of the conversation, but she did understand the last part as it was it was in english.
The lieutenant said “I guess I will be seeing you now stay out of trouble!”
Kurter, Lisa and parker waited for a while before they continued with their conversation.
“OK, before we go do you know where my husband is and Kurter’s dad?”
“Oh ummm....... he’s probably at the reeducation camp south of the city”
“Ok thanks alot!”
Now Kurter and Lisa were on their way.
It was a fascinating walk down many things had changed chinese patrolled the street and EVERYONE spoke chinese. Kurter couldn’t understand anything it was like a world with no hope but there was. All this chinese stuff almost made him want to walk up to a chinese soldier and beat him up but he did wish he could do something.
(eventually he would)
When they arrived at the black treacherous camp they asked someone who seemed to be nice with his wide smile to go get Greg and he did.
“Daaaad!!!” Kurter bellowed
“Kurter keep it down they might hear us.” Dad hissed
“You have to fill us in” Kurter’s mom urged with tears of joy streaming down her face.
“Well first of all you might want to know about a god called Lakitu and you don’t want to get in his way or else he will kill you!”
“WOW, ya we know and apparently he’s looking for us and he chased us all the way up mountain Scrap”
“You guys better get out of here Lakitu will be back soon and when you get back look around the mountain for the entrance to Scraps palace, you can figure out the rest”
“Thanks we will make sure we do that I wish you were here”
“Me too but you guys better go, stay strong!”
“Bye!” Kurter said in a sobby kind of voice.
“Kurter you heard your dad stay strong, now let’s head back to where our guns are and head to Scraps palace”
“Mom, we should watch out for Lakitu!”
“I know, we will”
Chapter 5: Scrap?
When Lisa and Kurter arrived back to their guns they picked them up and hauled them to the front of scraps entrance. There was no time for them to admire the underground structure they had to get it done quick. Kurter asked around and they all told him to go the same way which led to nowhere, then he saw it. It was a perfect purple door shoved to one corner. Kurter and his mom stormed in. Scrap was big, tall, purlple and yellow he almost looked like a big dinosaur with bombs that come out of his back, it was pretty crazy.
“Hello please allow me to Introduce myself, my name is Lisa and my son here is Kurter.”
“Yes, what do you want?”
“As you probably already know is that America’s at war with China and we need some of your troops to join us if that’s possible?”
“Hmmmm..... it does seem pretty serious, Scrapper put together an army for these mortals”
“Sure thing boss”
“Mortals take this it’s a radio you can tune in and see what’s happening so you know what to target next and take all the supplies you need, oh and don’t fail us”
“Yes Scrap, we will win (and get back my husband)”
“Boss ready to go”
“Good”
“Let’s go” Kurter said
“ We are camped up close to the top of the mountain” Lisa explained while walking up a steep slope to the entrance of their camp.
Scrapper said “First things first, what we should do is probably put together a plan, right?”
“Right”
“If we take out one of their major facilities then we can take out the heart”
“Huuhhh.... we could take out the reeducation camps, that would cause alot of trouble.” Lisa said
“Perfect Idea, let’s tune into the radio and listen to what’s happening out there”
Radio: “Tonight is a beautiful night with a high of 28 and a low of 17, now lets get back to the war, right now the education camps seem to be the only thing holding the Chinese high but if America can take out the education camp then all they need to do is target the heart then Californias back to its normal state.”
“That's it for tonight folks tune in next time on CNN.”
“Now for a Chinese broadcast.”
“Tomorrow morning we will head down to the city and attack the education camp, now here's the plan Lisa and Kurter you will flank right and take out the god Lakitu, you guys fine with that?”
“Yep we're cool” Kurter responded
“Ok now me and my group will break in through the entrance and save the prisoners and cover you guys”
“Wish ya‘ll luck now lets get back to sleep” Lisa exclaimed
Chapter 6: Rebellion
Kurter and Lisa arrived at right flank. They cut through the hard wired fence and snuck inside with relief no one saw them. As they approached the black building with the chinese flag on it they noticed a bomb went off at the entrance and distracted all the troops, their plan had worked. Kurter checked all around to see where Lakitu was but there was no sign of him.
“Mom I can’t find Lakitu!”
“Forget about Lakitu blow up the chinese building”
Kurter grabbed the china lake hanging on his back and steadied his aim. Kurter lock in the target and Pow the building exploded and Lisa waved the American flag around like
crazy showing her pride, then Kurter yelled mom watch out. Lakitu swooped down from the sky. Kurter yelled to his mom “get down!”
Lakitu shot a lightning bolt straight at the ground. Kurter and his mom got up straight away and ran into the guard building (no guards were there).
“Mom stay there I can take care of Lakitu myself now go warn the others and tell them to contact the army”
“NO!!, I will stay and die with you no matter what happens!”
“Fine, heres the plan one of us goes out and distracts it and the other goes up onto the roof and shoots Lakitu down”
“Alright let’s do it”
Lisa opened the door and leaped outside running around in circles trying to draw attention to Lakitu and Kurter was on the roof, it worked. Now all Kurter has to do is shoot Lakitu but the unexpected happened Kurters mom got struck by Lakitus lightning bolt and hit the ground with a loud thud. Fury crossed Kurters face.
“NOOOOO, Lakitu now you're dead!”
Without thinking Kurter jumped on Lakitus back, took out the china lake and shot Lakitu, but it wasn’t just the end for Lakitu.
Just after they died the Americans fought back with power and saved California from its turmoil. Kurter and Lisa's bodies were buried where they took their final stand, as for Greg no one ever recovered his body. Everyday people went to see their bodies and they were honored throughout history, Long live Kurter and Lisa.
Thats all of my story please comment :)
harrisen- in your story when the people are saying "ok" instead of typing ok type okay
harri- remember to indent ur paragraphs, and make it comic sans font.
also harri, capitalize China Lake at the end.
Thanks guys
welcs
You can't say "Long live Kurter and Lisa!" If they are already dead.
also, reread some things. There are places that need commas.
Anisha, he means long live the spirits. Its a saying.
Harrisen - in the correct format, that story is 5 pages long.
Nakul, how do you own the spiderscribe I created?
Also, go easy on the dialogue. (Harrisen)
Yes... I agree with Anisha... If that's all of your story... You should probably have way for narrative...
what does that mean han
More Narrative is like this...
On a scorching hot summer morning an unusual smell of sulfur blew right past Kurter’s nose but Kurter ignored it as he was watching his favorite show Terrance and Phillip with his dad. Whom he had cherished and admired for many years he would never leave his father's side, and he didn’t have anyone around all the time he was an only child living an ok life with his parents but his life is about to change.
Like... less dialouge...
double sided or not???? (for story)
not... he said he doesn't want to read 8 page long stories. He also said a good story is around 2-3 pages, shouldn't be longer than 4.
will he still read it though? i did a LOT of work and i don't want to erase it or get a bad grade on it :(
He'll read it, but unless your story is spot-on perfect, you will probably get a P. Do what I am doing. Check to see if you are wafflling at any point in your story. Also make sure you have paragraphed right, and that every part of your story is moving the story forward.
Very good advice Anisha! (For Carter I mean)
thanks anisha!
Thanks!
You're welcome! Also, I wasn't trying to say your story is bad.
Hi guys!
Mr.Buxton- should I e-mail u my fantasy writing or wait till Wednesday??? I am guessing email..
What did we do in the Social Studies essay thing?
Is there anything else important that we did at school?
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