The Tabitha speech was very inspiring today. It shows that, "if you want to move mountains, you must begin by taking away small stones." - You can make a difference. Do what you can to help.Important Dates
• Now – Wed 25 Apr (and to end of campaign): collect pledges at home
• Wed 25 Apr: Jumpathon (during your Sci/SS period in the morning – more specific info about the event itself will follow)
• Thu 26 Apr – Fri 4 May: turn in pledges to home form teachers (more info about the daily collection of these funds from you and collation of all funds will follow as well)
The aim is for each class to raise a minimum of $1,550 which will put the grade over the $20,000 goal. As in the past, there is a pizza lunch offered as a reward for the class with the highest amount raised. I WANT TO WIN THIS PIZZA PARTY!Social Studies: Make sure your: Statement of Purpose for your Singapore research project is due for Wednesday. - You probably need to spend 30 minutes doing notes on your project
You must have visited your site by May 2nd
Due Date for this final project = Week of May 21st
RLA: Spend 30-45mins working on your fantasy story. People that did not give their pitches today, must do so tomorrow. - Feel free to post your pitches on the blog for common. Those students who didn't receive a financial investment in their stories from 'Buxtoversal Studios' should not be perturbed. Harry Potter was rejected 26 times before finding an investor.
Fantasy story due date pushed back until next Wed. 25th
Verb Package Booklet: Pages numbered p.48,34,49 (Due: Tue) - POSTPONED (We will work on this tomorrow)
No Math H/W tonight
47 comments:
Mr.Buxton for the verb booklet i have finshed it over the weekend so can i show it to you tommorow?
Also for the fanstasy wirting when it due? Also what was the highest invest you gave $7,000,000?
By the way my moral of my fanstasy writing is that being your self is the best way to live, and the best gift you can ever recive.
Mr.Buxton for the verb booklet i have finshed it over the weekend so can i show it to you tommorow?
Also for the fanstasy wirting when it due? Also what was the highest invest you gave $7,000,000?
By the way my moral of my fanstasy writing is that being your self is the best way to live, and the best gift you can ever recive.
So... Is our fanatsy due next Wed or this Friday???
Finished the WHOLE booklet???
My moral of my fantasy story is it's not what you have it's who you are.
Mr.Buxton can you help me on my statement of purpose since the merlion has so many differant catorigoes and i cannot just pick a catorgoery to write on. These are the catorgies
Locations
Merlions designs, body parts represent
Toruist connections
Creation of Merlion
Effect on Singapore
Mr.Buxton for the soltial studies project the due date is this wensday????
oh and by the way... My story is about a kid who HATES fruit and vegtables and would never eat them, worried his parents go to a local doctor and tell him about the situation, he says that is the boy does not eat his greens he will eventually get sick and die. Luckly the doctor is actually a witch doctor is discise.
after telling the parents they agree to let him put a spell on their son. the spell is that when he ever eats any food (non vegatble) he will tast ONLY vegtables/fruit! and the onlt way to break the spell is to eat a fruit/vegtable to break the curse!
and in the end he finds out that he really likes them! the moral of the story is to step out of your comfort zone and try new things!
You just have to have your Statement of Purpose by Wednesday, the WHOLE project is due sometime in May...
Nick no
Mr.Buxton- This is my story...A girl drinks something in her father’s lab (Her father is a scientist) she is not suppose to. She comes to have super powers and tries to decide whether she should use it for good or bad. There comes to be a battle scene in her head with a good side of her vs. a bad side of her. She turns out to use her powers for bad, but her best friend tries to persuade the girl to thinking what she is doing is wrong.
This is just my idea I am addding the settings and dialouge stuff...
Question- For the elevator pitches do we need to present the seed idea to Mr.Buxton or do we need to have the setting, dialouge, etc in it. (ONLY WHEN DOING THE ELEVATOR PITCHES)
Mr.Buxton i haven't done my elevator pitch yet but some key things you need to know about my story is:
This old candy witch who is the owner of a candy shop, but actually her candy has evil magical powers. For example: colors of gum drops have different effects - red is fever and blue is hypothermia.
My plot is: all these kids go to an evil old candy witch's candy shop and get sick and maybe even die. one day a random kid go to the candy shop and is immune to the candy powers sooner or later he finds out that the candy has evil powers and battles with the witch.
if we can get each person in the class to donate $73 we will add up to $1,606 but if we're only going for $1,550 then each person donates $71.
Do you need to have a whole setting description for the elevator pitch or just have the settings?? (Sorry, I am asking 2 many questions today...)
my idea for the elevator pitch is that 4 kids have these powers and use them to stop the war: kids vs. adults the war started when kids started getting to tired of listening to their parents and their parents got tired of their children being annoying and so demanding. is it good? the kids try not 2 kill/harass adults but are forced 2 when they are defending themselves the kids just want to let their be peace and for there to be family's or just to live life correctly without war.
7 million - max... i was generous when i started...
next wed (25th)
write the statement like a sentence... i want to learn about... then state what you want ot learn about... it will end up writing itself.
sounds interesting Nick
6 million investment .... take time to describe the doc., the waiting room, the mom, the kid and the thigs he eats...each time you eat a meal... use that for ideas on what to write about
Han - what is her motivation...? why drink something in lab without a reason. Motivation is powerful...ask Emma!
Rachel.. idea seems like a water melon...no message...characters seem to lack motivation... kids are smart enough not to hang around with withches with poisonous candy... no investment at this time
water melosn idea Carter .. .where did they get the powers from, why the fight? idea is too broad and will be difficult to write about succintly...
conflict bdetween parents and kids is a good idea, but drop the wars and other... simple is always better
ok, but is the idea ok so far...?
mr. buxton- wat would my investment be so far?
no Han... unless there is a reason for her drinking something in a science lab... then you are starting on a weak foundation
'no investment' as idea isn't focused
sorry Carter.. the executives at Buxtoversal Studios are not ready to invest in your project at this time!
How about this....? (I don't think it is any better...+ I definitely will add more..like the dialouge stuff...)
A girl named Cyrilla lives with her father near the Eiffel tower in New York. Cyrilla’s father is a scientist creating potions and experimenting with other materials. Cyrilla and her father barely spend any time together as her father is so busy working on a new potion. Cyrilla goes out to find out what could be so important that her father isn’t spending time with her anymore. Cyrilla discovers something hidden in her father’s lab. No label, neither any pictures are shown in the potion, which what seems to look like a normal drink. Cyrilla drinks the potion without thinking what it might be. She tries to calm down and face the fact she has super powers and thinks for the possibilities. Cyrilla decides whether she should use her new powers for good or bad. There comes to be a battle scene in her head with a good side of her vs. a bad side of her. She turns out to use her powers for bad, but her best friend Alice tries to persuade Cyrilla to think what she is doing is wrong.
My big idea for the elevator pitch is Sacrifice and Bravery.
It starts off with some mysterious object crashing about 50 miles away from Hawaii contaminating the water and disintegrating everything but metal. 3 kids, Nick, Jake, and Harry live in Hawaii and Harry was swimming and gets contaminated. Nick and Jake get confused but find out about this and put their lives on the stake to destroy this 'thing' with a special knife that was given to Nick by his Grandmother that can cut metal.
I will shorten it
Much more specific and there is more reasoning behind Cyrilla's actions...
thank you....
Mine???
here's ,y fantasy idea since it was rejected the first time:
Princess Rosalinda lives in Ziatopia with her parents and her dog, Daffodil. All of the other living creatures in Ziatopia are animals. It's features are very forest like, such as ponds, vines, trees, and more. You can hear peacefulness and flowing water. Princess Rosalinda is going to be crowned prettiest girl of the decade in 2 months. One day, she is walking Daffodil. Then she gets struck by a purple lightning bolt. She wakes up in New York City. Unable to get back to Ziatopia on her own, she finds a genie and asks him how to get back. She apparently has to wait to get struck by a purple lightning bolt again. She only has Daffodil to talk to, so she decides that it could be awhile before she gets back, so she explores the city. She finds that many people do not live the same way as she does, which reminds her of most of the animals in Ziatopia. Throughout her journey, she starts to feel that she needs to take action when she gets back to Ziatopia. When she finally gets struck by a purple lightning bolt and gets back to Ziatopia, she rejects the crown of Prettiest girl and decides to work towards the crown of Animal Affectionate.
What is a good name for the father in my story?
A bit about him:
He is caring, empathetic but not so smart in areas concerning common sense.
My big idea for the elevator pitch is Sacrifice and Bravery.
It starts off with some mysterious object crashing about 50 miles away from Hawaii contaminating the water and disintegrating everything but metal. 3 kids, Nick, Jake, and Harry live in Hawaii and Harry was swimming and gets contaminated. Nick and Jake get confused but find out about this and put their lives on at stake to destroy this 'thing' with a special knife that was given to Nick by his Grandmother that can cut metal. Jake and Nick set off on a small chunk of metal and use it as a boat. Accidents like dropping the knife could lead to chaos or lost lives when Jake dropped the knife and desperately trying to save it for the price of his life. Nick had to continue on without his best-friend but with the knife
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Phil would suit that Maddy!
Maddy- This is wierd but,
Omsorg.
That means caring in Swedish.
I think Phil's better because Swedish probably won't fit in her story
I was gonna make them live in a rural town, but still on earth... Omsorg is a good name but I want to be more realistic (but still symbolic), I may put a twist on that! Thanks!
Nakul- I don't know if these are good questions based on your story but...
How does the mysterious object come...?
But in my opinion, it is really good so far.
Nakul - I love how you put a twist on the idea of pollution, but your plot is quite complicated for a 3-4 page story.
Something to consider adding:
How are they gonna destroy this 'thing' if they don't even know what/who to look for or where to look for it/them?
Something to considering editing/taking out:
Jake's death doesn't seem like it will help you make the story as amazing as it possibly could be.
Han- Isn't the Eiffel Tower in Paris, France?
Okay... So I'll take out that part and I'll like leave small cluse behind like a green trail of water or in the news where they find this thing out like 50 miles west or north. I'll find out about ship navigating and that might help!
My big idea for the elevator pitch is Sacrifice and Bravery.
It starts off with some mysterious object crashing about 50 miles away from Hawaii contaminating the water and disintegrating everything but metal. 3 kids, Nick, Jake, and Harry live in Hawaii and Harry was swimming and gets contaminated. Nick and Jake get confused but find out about this and put their lives on at stake to destroy this 'thing' with a special knife that was given to Nick by his Grandmother that can cut metal. Jake and Nick set off on a small chunk of metal and use it as a boat. Following the clues that the news told about going west and about a green trail, Nick and Jake hope for the best.
IS this better
Writing in 3rd person is so much easier than writing in 1st person! However, I am going to write in 1st person anyway.
Why did you choose Hawaii, too? You might want to have your setting be significant to the story.
can i use the word "alivenate" in my writing? It means to make alive.
Oh Yeah! Sorry I meant Paris!
Hawaii is near the Pacific Ocean the largest ocean and disintegrating may cause a volcanic eruption in the volcano in Hawaii and my mom and dad have been there so they can help me with the setting!
Anisha's idea for fantasy (I don't think it is really good, but it is something I can work with. I had to do this before 4 or I wouldn't have been able to have gotten feedback):
A shape shifter gets stuck in a deformed shape. All dignity has escaped her. Antagonist says that they can help. Antagonist just wants the power so he can carry out plans of crime.
This is just Anisha's seed idea. For more details, ask later. Just say if the idea is worth writing.
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