Eliza, your writing peace was amazing because you were very descriptive when you told about when and where you got your dog. You were also very descriptive when you told how it was outside. For example you said rich evergreen scents and dew of the morning twinkled on the grass.
Thank you lindsay, yours was amazing and so touching when you talked about your brother. Great job talking about the smells and what comforted you. I loved your ending. I wouldn't change anything. You also have great use of proper nouns and specifics.
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Eliza, your writing peace was amazing because you were very descriptive when you told about when and where you got your dog. You were also very descriptive when you told how it was outside. For example you said rich evergreen scents and dew of the morning twinkled on the grass.
ReplyDeleteThank you lindsay, yours was amazing and so touching when you talked about your brother. Great job talking about the smells and what comforted you. I loved your ending. I wouldn't change anything. You also have great use of proper nouns and specifics.
ReplyDeleteThank you Bekah, Liza, and Lindsay for commenting on my writing
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