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Thursday, October 1, 2009

Evaluating Newspaper Article - Mentor Texts

Enjoy these 'unedited' examples of  your most recent  assignment on evaluting a newspaper article. Will  your evaluation of  President Obama's speech contain clear examples of your opinion? Notice this time i have highlighted just opinion statements.

Filled with tater tots, cheese curls, and trail mix, Mr. Smith’s tractor slowly moves to the pig pen. Pigs Switch to Trail Mix is an unusual, but interesting article from the Wall Street Journal. Surprisingly, farmers are switching to fatty foods for their pigs! Oddly enough farmers, like Mr. Smith are now feeding there pigs tater tots. Cheese Curls are another strange food you can find on a farm. People food is now on a weird feed for animals like trail mix. Sadly, farmers are really hard time feeding their animals. Unfortunately, the whole reason pigs are switching to fatty foods is because of how high priced corn is these days. To feed the animals only fatty foods is a disaster because it depresses them. Farmers have figured out that pigs are really picky eaters, so they have to them sugary foods. Some of the vocabulary that was in my article was very difficult to understand. Mitigate, to make something less harsh, was one of the words I thought was difficult. Also, byproducts, something produced as a secondary result by manufacturers, was another word I did not know. Ethanol, a colorless liquid with a pleasant smell, also was new to me. The engaging and sad article Pig Switch Trail Mix is most unusual article that I have ever read. As Mr. Smith puts the tater tots, trail mix, and cheese curls into the squirming pigs troth, he is glad the pigs like their food.    by Paige

Finally, Seay feels a tug on his line, and as he reels in he sees that hard, scaly snout and treacherous pointed teeth. The Charlotte Observer’s story on four fishermen catching an alligator, written by Andrew Dys, is both breathtaking and amazing. The characters in this story, Seay, Fields, Honeycutt, and Martin, are astonishing. These people have numerous character traits. One of the character traits that these people possess is adventurousness because most people would never go hunting for alligators. Also, they are very persistent, because they never gave up on conquering that alligator. I am very impressed by them. I believe the action in this article could have been better, but they did use some very descriptive details in quite a few places. For example, they could have used more descriptive writing on how they got the alligator into the boat. Although, they did use some decent descriptive words and quotes when they narrated how the fishermen never gave up. One of the quotes was “No way we were going to give up once we got him hooked.” I believe that the information in this article is well chosen and informative. A very valid piece of information is that alligators are indigenous to South Carolina and have been around this state much longer than humans. Another important piece of information is that in 2009 more than 3700 people applied for the 1000 hunting tags. To conclude, this story needs a bit more descriptive writing but gives some impressive information. At last Martin got a noose around the gators jaws and Honeycutt ended the fight with a shot to the head.   by Handy

15 comments:

  1. Mr. buxton,
    for our obama speech evaluation, do we need the power plan for tommorow or can we just write it up for tommorow...?

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  2. just power plan full of power 2s and p3s only...

    spend tonight practicing for sentences test using blg websites

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  3. can we meet up again about the opinions because i still don't get what you mean? My newspaper article we just got back and I just talked to my mom about it and my grade and how we were confused of what you meant.
    Abigail

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  4. mr.B do we have to bring in our favorite cuddle stuffed animal on fri.?!?!?!?!?
    Luke

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  5. Mr.Buxton,
    How long does our obama speech evaluation thing have to be?
    Luke

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  6. Can you please tell me if this is a good topic sentence. President Obama's speech, September 7th at Wakefield High School, inspired kids to get opportunities for an education.
    Tomorrow for wearing the latin colors if you can where a latin football jersey?
    Abigail

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  7. Can you please tell me if this is a good topic sentence. President Obama's speech, September 7th at Wakefield High School, inspired kids to get opportunities for an education.
    Tomorrow for wearing the latin colors i was wondering if we could where a latin football jersey?
    Abigail

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  8. do all categories have to have opinions?
    abigail

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  9. Abbie,

    I'm not sure about this but my brothers teacher said you could wear a jersey since it is a Latin jersey!

    Caroline Mackey

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  10. do we need to have a closing hook?
    abigail

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  11. is restate red?
    abigail

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  12. yea Abbie it is!
    Black - Hooks
    Red - Topic sentence and restate
    Green - Power 2's
    Blue - Power 3's

    Caroline Mackey

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  13. thanks caroline
    abigail

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