is this good? Name: Carter Gilbert Date: May 27th 2012 Focus: Literary Essay
Thesis Statement Marble Champ by Gary Soto is palpably about trying your best to transform your flaws into strengths, and acting kind towards your opponents.
Opening Paragraph “I wish I could do something, anything, even marbles.” Lupe, the main character, is bad at sports but good at schoolwork. One day she tries at marbles because she wants to be good at a sport. She practices for two whole weeks until the tournament. During the game instead of ignoring the person she had beaten she talks to them and in the end she has a group of her opponents cheering for her. “That’s it. Maybe I could be good at playing marbles.”
Introduction Marble Champ is about a girl, Lupe, who is really good at math, RLA, social studies, science, and everything else that has to do with school, but she is terrible at sports. “I’ll never be good at sports ... I wish I could win something, anything, even marbles...” immediately after that she starts practicing for the tournament in two weeks. During the championship, all of her opponents instead of ignoring them she brings them with her and she makes a small group of new friends that cheer for her. In the end she actually wins the championship.
Marble Champ is about trying your best to transform your flaws into strengths. Lupe lays around hopelessly thinking that she’ll never be good at sports until marbles cross her mind. Immediately after that she starts practicing for two weeks until the marble championship comes along. That shows that she is trying her best to turn her flaws, playing sports, into a strength because she practices so much that she even chooses practicing marbles over schoolwork.
Marble Champ is also about not leaving your opponents behind. In the story, Lupe won the first game, but instead of immediately moving on she befriended her opponent. Gradually throughout the story she befriends her opponents and as she plays they cheer on, thus giving her more support.
After reading this book you learn that if you win, don’t leave your opponent in the dust, bring them with you and you could actually turn out to be really good friends. Also try your best to do stuff that seem impossible, to you, but turn out to be easy after you practice a while.
Also, Olivia (Clayton class) found this great quote by anonymous: "I consider myself a crayon. I might not be your favorite color, but one day you are going to need me to complete your picture."
I remembered that one time there was this 5th grader named Jeremy and he said, "Life is a waffle. It can be burnt and you can have many toppings (eg berries and cream).
Han, when Rachel said, "That's what you think Han." She didn't really mean it in a bad way. She was just saying that that's your own opinion because everyone has different opinions.
Here is a list of 'Life Similes' I put together: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1okhvqtBUlEkUmkIy2EaEWhd8yGxp1WQ-VBxsEAko4mE/edit I you want, you can help me add to the list by putting you life simile into a comment.
Mr. Buxton - I thought you would especially like this one: Life is like a grammar lesson. You must find the past, present, and future tense to continue on your way.
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how come you weren't here today?
ReplyDeleteRachel- I think he was sick.... Yeah! Social Studies Project!
ReplyDeleteHope you feel better!
ReplyDeleteMr.Buxton do you pick the subsitute teachers????
ReplyDeletereally! the teachers this week were't the best...
ReplyDeletealso can you please download the play day pics to the blog?
ReplyDeleteHi Mr. B!!! WE MISSED YOU!!! WE LIKE YOU A LOT MORE THAN THE TEACHERS. They were nice but you're the best!
ReplyDeletethat's what you think han
ReplyDeleteI'll get so frustrated if we EVER get this substitute teacher again. Hope you feel better.
ReplyDeleteNO precept?
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ReplyDeleteis this good?
ReplyDeleteName: Carter Gilbert
Date: May 27th 2012
Focus: Literary Essay
Thesis Statement
Marble Champ by Gary Soto is palpably about trying your best to transform your flaws into strengths, and acting kind towards your opponents.
Opening Paragraph
“I wish I could do something, anything, even marbles.” Lupe, the main character, is bad at sports but good at schoolwork. One day she tries at marbles because she wants to be good at a sport. She practices for two whole weeks until the tournament. During the game instead of ignoring the person she had beaten she talks to them and in the end she has a group of her opponents cheering for her. “That’s it. Maybe I could be good at playing marbles.”
Introduction
Marble Champ is about a girl, Lupe, who is really good at math, RLA, social studies, science, and everything else that has to do with school, but she is terrible at sports. “I’ll never be good at sports ... I wish I could win something, anything, even marbles...” immediately after that she starts practicing for the tournament in two weeks. During the championship, all of her opponents instead of ignoring them she brings them with her and she makes a small group of new friends that cheer for her. In the end she actually wins the championship.
Marble Champ is about trying your best to transform your flaws into strengths.
Lupe lays around hopelessly thinking that she’ll never be good at sports until marbles cross her mind. Immediately after that she starts practicing for two weeks until the marble championship comes along. That shows that she is trying her best to turn her flaws, playing sports, into a strength because she practices so much that she even chooses practicing marbles over schoolwork.
Marble Champ is also about not leaving your opponents behind.
In the story, Lupe won the first game, but instead of immediately moving on she befriended her opponent. Gradually throughout the story she befriends her opponents and as she plays they cheer on, thus giving her more support.
After reading this book you learn that if you win, don’t leave your opponent in the dust, bring them with you and you could actually turn out to be really good friends. Also try your best to do stuff that seem impossible, to you, but turn out to be easy after you practice a while.
How many times have you used 'you' Carter?
ReplyDeleteRephrase -finishing this book, -readers will
Mr.Buxton- all the people who threw water on you on play day apologize. We think it was because of the water that you got sick. Sorry..............
ReplyDeleteGet well soon! Are the literary essays really gonna be due Tues? You never really gave us instructions on what to do.
on firday
ReplyDeleteRachel- ......was that suppose to be said in a bad way????
ReplyDeleteMr.Buxton- Can you put up the week at the glance sheet???? (Only if you feel better though... Hope you feel better!)
Yah, I was wondering the same thing as Anisha!
ReplyDeleteAlso, Olivia (Clayton class) found this great quote by anonymous:
"I consider myself a crayon. I might not be your favorite color, but one day you are going to need me to complete your picture."
I remembered that one time there was this 5th grader named Jeremy and he said, "Life is a waffle. It can be burnt and you can have many toppings (eg berries and cream).
ReplyDeleteHan, when Rachel said, "That's what you think Han." She didn't really mean it in a bad way. She was just saying that that's your own opinion because everyone has different opinions.
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ReplyDeleteHere is a list of 'Life Similes' I put together:
ReplyDeletehttps://docs.google.com/document/d/1okhvqtBUlEkUmkIy2EaEWhd8yGxp1WQ-VBxsEAko4mE/edit
I you want, you can help me add to the list by putting you life simile into a comment.
Mr. Buxton -
I thought you would especially like this one:
Life is like a grammar lesson. You must find the past, present, and future tense to continue on your way.
Yes....I also agree with Maddy and Anisha....
ReplyDeleteCan you put up the week at a glance sheet???? I know I need to study for the tenses test and end of year math test, but what else???
Here is a website for transitional phrases just to improve p3s in your Literary essays.
ReplyDeletewww.smart-words.org/transition-words.html
Your welcome! ;)