Evaluating - Mentor Text Example from our story

Make sure the evaluation of your newspaper article resembles the paragraph below. Your opinion of what you read should be very evident. Follow effective paragrpah struture by using the color codes. Have you integrated some advanced simple sentences, an appositive, and strong vocabulary?
HOW GOOD IS YOUR SENTENCEFLUENCY?
If many of your sentences begin with I or the same word, CHANGE THEM!

Two adventurous fifth grade school girls search out more than they bargained for while attending a class outing at the Natural History Museum. A Mummy Mystery is an exciting story that leaves readers on the edge of their seats. The main characters, Molly and Lena, are very mischievous throughout the story. Even though they should be with their class, they wander off on their own almost immediately on their arrival at the museum. Lena is probably the most disobedient of the two. Molly seems be the type of person who worries about what other people think, “Mr. Gardiner will be furious with us!” she exclaimed at one stage in the story. Alternatively, Lena’s fascination with ancient Egypt and complete disregard for her class was demonstrated when she almost ran toward the larger banner over the entrance to the Great Hall. The author, Andrew Clements, tries to use humor to break down some of the tension that builds in the story. It was amusing when Officer Johnson thought he was on T.V. when he first saw the Mummy’s hand move or when Molly whispered to Lena about the Mummy, “…it looks more like a squirrel that’s been hit by a car.” The author does not seem to pay meticulous attention to all of the fine details, leaving some of the events of the story a little confusing. How would a mouse be able to burrow under the Mummy’s wrappings without causing damage? Moreover, the mouse would have died of suffocation if it had been stuck in the glass case all that time. Any “…ancient pieces of corn or wheat”, would surely be rotten after thousands of years and could not have provided food for the mouse. Despite some over exaggerated facts, the daring exploits of Molly and Lena and a few light hearted jokes make the tale, A Mummy Mystery both memorable and enjoyable. On your next field trip, I’d watch the exhibits really closely if I were you. Just in case.

 

Rights and Responsibilities Lesson

 

Nice conversation today Ms. Graham's class. Enjoy the video below. Avoiding 'stereotyping' people is very important. Comments related to our conversation?

Week 5 Homework

Click on the title above to see your H/W sheet.

Phrase of the Week
Wag more, bark less

Vocabulary of the Week
Gesticulate

Are you ready for the challenge this week?

Take time to organize those folders this weekend please!

Civility - Compassion - Empathy

What did you learn about Civility - Compassion - Empathy that you will remember for the rest of your life?

How will you 'make a difference?'

Enjoy our class song on 'others first' again. Think about the message it portrays. Comments are appreciated

Evaluating - Review

Thinking about evaluating: Read below to help reinforce today’s session


An 'Evaluation' is an opinion about a piece of writing. It is not a summary of a story.

How do you develop an opinion?

Pretend you are a food critics who have been asked to evaluate a restaurant. What will you be looking for to make a decision about whether or not the restaurant is a good one??

Think about CRITERIA (categories)


Service; Tasty Food; Cleanliness of place; Popular or not; Variety of food; Price to value; Looks like; smells; appearance of store; Healthy food?

Next, you prioritize your categories! What is the most important category to make your final decision about the restaurant?

Once you have categories to think about your opinion, you can back up your opinion with Proof—proper nouns, “quotes”, facts, numbers, dates, names, vocab. Take notes about the Details! Such as Service: The waiter brought us snails when we ordered shrimp. Waiter was rude—he did not seem interested in us at all. He was grumpy. Cleanliness: Roach in the booth. Gum under the table. Hair in the food.

Don’t forget your opening hook and topic sentence. You are on your way to evaluating!

Lesson Review

It is important to reflect on everything we covered today.

1) Can you remember the 6-traits of effective writing?

2) If you can answer question, you will know how your next writing assignemnt will be graded!

3) Do you know the difference between power 1s, power 2s, power3s?

4) What are you doing when asked to give your opinion?

5) Why is selecting p2s the hardest for writing?

If you can answer all of the above, you have a good grasp of today's work.

Social Studies

What is the difference between a direct democracy and a representative democracy?

Do not forget your newspaper article for tomorrow? What categories do you think you will use to evaluate the article?

Try putting some of your simple sentences on the blog. Maybe friends can comment on them.

Have a nice evening.