Identity unit assessment

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 Side note: My recovery is going well, slowly but surely. I look forward to being back in the classroom after the break.Take care and enjoy your vacation.

After the October break:
We will do a short week on suspense writing when we return. Come to school on the Monday with an idea for a scary story!

Have a great break...

Endings

DUE DATE IDENTITY PIECE: WEDNESDAY - No new extensions

Lesson Recap

Emotions Database: emotion

Which of these types of endings will you use in your identity piece?

Grammar Review

FRIDAY MESSAGE

SHOWING - Not telling

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Leads and Openings

Grammar Unit: Subjects and Predicates

What emotions will you stir in your reader with your opening?

Which of these types of leads will you use in your identity piece?

C/D and E/F
You must copy your lead into this file before the end of class.
 Leads. 

Grammar Unit: Subjects and Predicates

Identity Project:

You should have almost completed 75% of your 1st draft by Thur.

Checklist: Can you name the structural and transitional moves you made? Are you using stronger or weaker structural moves?

A piece from last year to look at:
Essay: Who Am I?

Notice how Meagan does a really nice job of 'showing' a scene - not TELLING. Look at the specific word choice that creates imagery.

It was around 4:30 in the afternoon. on September 22nd The day before my mom's birthday, and I didn’t have a gift for her. She wasn't home, so I went into her closest and reached up to the birthday supplies. I grabbed the dark and light purple tissue paper and closed the green box. Needing scissors and pipe cleaners, I went to the art supply closet right next to the front door and got the scissors and pipe cleaners. I went into my room and got to work. I got the scissors and the tissue paper and cut the purples into squares, all of equal sizes. folded the paper in half, unfolded it and did an accordion fold. When I finished the folding, I wrapped the middle of the paper with the pipe cleaner and opened the paper. I started to lift up the paper layer by layer. When I finished with all six layers I started to fluff up the paper and it started to look more like a rose. When my mom’s birthday came the next day I gave her my little roses.

Other Examples

• Anecdote with Reflection at End (Lois Lowry"1946") 
• Student Example 1
• Student Example 2
• Box and Bullets Student Example

Identity Project

It is time to start putting your piece together.

Tips
Can you divide your piece into SCENES?
Are you using a variety of different structural moves to build your scenes?
Are you using various transition techniques to go between scenes?
Are you using imagery in your piece or other craft moves?

Mentor

Possible Structure Moves

H/W - You should have at least 50% of the scenes written for tomorrow's class.

We will do intro and conclusion Thursday.