Outlining 2

Use this organizer to help you outline

Difficulty writing your claim? use this link to help you structure your claim and supporting ideas.
http://www.tommarch.com/electraguide/thesis.php

Notice the reference to the claim in the supporting paragraph

Summative RR - Thirteen & Half

Mentor 1 - Outlining

Use these to help with your interpretation

• Feelings/Emotions  Word list
• Colors Wordlist

H/W  C/D and E/F
Continue preparing your outline for 'Thirteen and a Half' for your summative. You must finish your summative in class tomorrow. (1 hr)

Interpretive assciation

H/W
All classes : Quote Sandwich - drop your redrafted work here. DUE THURSDAY
Make sure you have finished reading your bookclub book. Reading responses will begin tomorrow.

Lesson recap:

Use these to help with your emotive
Feelings/Emotions  Word list
Colors Wordlist

Today we looked at the challenging topic called interpretive association. The expectation is that you integrate these techniques into your reading responses. Do not try to use all of them at the same time; three or four of them will add depth to your  interpretations.

Tomorrow we begin a reading response on your book club book - INDIVIDUALLY. This will be a second summative grade for this interpretation unit. You will have two days and the weekend to finish you Reading response. See mentor texts from last year.

Mentor 1
Mentor 2
Mentor 3

Next Week

• If you missed your subjects and predicates test on Friday, you will do it on Wednesday.
• If you did not turn in your suspense writing (many people from C/D class) make sure it is copied on the 'Suspense summative' doc in your drive. I will just enter this grade as zero after Wednesday if I do not receive this work!
• There are still a few people who are missing grades for identity project. I will not continue to chase you! Get this work to this resubmitted work file as soon as possible.

All classes: Your 'quote sandwich' from Friday's class should be turned into this link. Students to copy and paste that writing in this document here.  You will be given 15 minutes in class on Wednesday to do any finishing touches. My expectation is that you work just as hard with a substitute as you do when I am in class. This  work will be graded!

How does your piece compare with this one?

Next Week 

• Book Club Conversation Assessment
• Summative Reading Response
• Interpretive Association:  This is difficult! Are you ready to think abstractly? What do you notice about the difference between the way this text is being interpreted? 

Do these HB slides  as circle time.

subjects and predicates test

Students to copy and paste that writing in this document here.

Finding Meaning

Subjects and Predicates Review

c/d & e/f classes only -  subject and predicate test

The test is open notes. Students may bring in any notes to refer to in the test.  You should know exactly what are the for different types of subjects and for different types of predicates.

Lesson Recap: Finding meaning across different media

H/W -  Read! all classes will have a bookclub. 

You will have to write a quote sandwich based on your bookclub discussions in class tomorrow.

Interpreting Text Techniques

Lesson Recap

H/W - READ - Be prepared for your book club talk tomorrow.

C/D & E/F - Consider doing 5 mins of practice for subjects and predicates test on Friday. Links are in Monday's post.

Quote Sandwiches + Warrants

Read aloud The Bad Sister 

Root of the Week: terr - earth/land

Lesson Recap

We learned to use quote sandwiches and warrants to help structure our interpretations of text.

H/W - All classes

Read to your agreed upon bookclub page.  Come to class tomorrow with an opinion about your book club book (a claim/discussion point) - based on the pages that you read.  e.g. The book is 'probably' teaching readers that the most important things in life are worth fighting for

Fri - Subjects and Predicates Test. (optional - but highly encouraged)
Spend 5 minutes peach evening practicing these activities between now and Friday, so that you have studied for the test.

http://www.towson.edu/ows/exercisesubjpred2.htm

http://www.quia.com/rr/36765.html

http://www.quia.com/rr/36764.html

http://www.quia.com/quiz/673842.html?AP_rand=1501518670

http://www.myschoolhouse.com/courses/O/1/55.asp

http://streaming.discoveryeducation.com/braingames/iknowthat/TagAWord/TagAWord.cfm?Topic=SubjectsPredicates

http://teachers.sduhsd.k12.ca.us/cshope/Grammar%20lessons/subject%20predicate%20quiz.htm

Videos

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tjc9PXJKEck

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=3qKjKC5RFhg&feature=related

Games

http://fen.com/studentactivities/SinkOrSwim/SinkorSwim.html

Use arrow keys and space bar to catch fish

Argument Writing: On Demand

Use this resource for Monday's class work: Argument On Demand.

Suspense Day 4

Reminder to all classes that your suspense writing is due tomorrow.

C/D & E/F Classes only- Highlight your opening and delayed adjectives in blue.

Remember, you are being assessed on craft and delivery of your story. This means that even if you do not have the most interesting of plots, BUT if you use your voice really well and in an engaging way, you can still score exemplary for your speaking grade. Make sure you have checked out the rubric below.
P'IPES rubric.



Win plus point if you copy a short section from your story into the comments.

Suspense Day 3

P'IPES rubric.

H/W +2 points
Copy a short scene from your writing and paste it into the 'comments' section. State what writing craft move or grammar technique you have used?

Suspense Day 2: Writing Craft

Root you the week: per

H/W - c/d & e/f classes

You should spend 20 minutes writing one of your scenes for your suspense story. (Due Wed)

g/h - Finish your outline so that you are ready to write tomorrow.

suspense  stories student samples

 sample one

 sample two

 sample three

RECAP OF TODAY"S LESSON CONTENT

Writing craft moves from today's class. You must use at least three 'phrase/sentence level' moves and at least two 'scene level' moves in your piece.

Grammar - Recap: Opening Adjectives

For my HB only: Add a comment - what did you learn today?

Remember  'can I change' idea for Friday.

Suspense Writing: Day 1

Homework CD and EF classes only. 
Spend 20 minutes working on your outline for your suspense story.
You must have bullet point ideas for:
1) Characters problems (list 4- 6 small things that go bad)
2) Setting - time/place
3) Names of characters
4) 2 or 3 things you will describe
5) Aspect of suspense e.g. twist ending - NO 'DREAM' endings!

Make a copy of this file: Suspense unit Digital notebook
Make a copy of this file: Opening and Delayed Adjectives and Adverbs

Grammar Recap

Speaking Recap

suspense  stories student samples

 sample one

 sample two

 sample three

Coming this  Quarter:

• Ethos, pathos, logos
• Research based arguments
• Opening and Delayed adjectives and adverbs
• Parallelism,  comparative, and superlatives
• Reading:  techniques for text  interpretation

Identity unit assessment

Grades are coming to your inbox very soon. Listen carefully to the voice feedback. You have three weeks from the receipt of the grades  (not including the holiday) to resubmit if you choose to do so. If you are wondering why you didn't receive exemplary, Then compare your finished product with work here.

 Side note: My recovery is going well, slowly but surely. I look forward to being back in the classroom after the break.Take care and enjoy your vacation.

After the October break:
We will do a short week on suspense writing when we return. Come to school on the Monday with an idea for a scary story!

Have a great break...

Endings

DUE DATE IDENTITY PIECE: WEDNESDAY - No new extensions

Lesson Recap

Emotions Database: emotion

Which of these types of endings will you use in your identity piece?

Grammar Review

FRIDAY MESSAGE

SHOWING - Not telling

Take care... See you soon!

Leads and Openings

Grammar Unit: Subjects and Predicates

What emotions will you stir in your reader with your opening?

Which of these types of leads will you use in your identity piece?

C/D and E/F
You must copy your lead into this file before the end of class.
 Leads. 

Grammar Unit: Subjects and Predicates

Identity Project:

You should have almost completed 75% of your 1st draft by Thur.

Checklist: Can you name the structural and transitional moves you made? Are you using stronger or weaker structural moves?

A piece from last year to look at:
Essay: Who Am I?

Notice how Meagan does a really nice job of 'showing' a scene - not TELLING. Look at the specific word choice that creates imagery.

It was around 4:30 in the afternoon. on September 22nd The day before my mom's birthday, and I didn’t have a gift for her. She wasn't home, so I went into her closest and reached up to the birthday supplies. I grabbed the dark and light purple tissue paper and closed the green box. Needing scissors and pipe cleaners, I went to the art supply closet right next to the front door and got the scissors and pipe cleaners. I went into my room and got to work. I got the scissors and the tissue paper and cut the purples into squares, all of equal sizes. folded the paper in half, unfolded it and did an accordion fold. When I finished the folding, I wrapped the middle of the paper with the pipe cleaner and opened the paper. I started to lift up the paper layer by layer. When I finished with all six layers I started to fluff up the paper and it started to look more like a rose. When my mom’s birthday came the next day I gave her my little roses.

Other Examples

• Anecdote with Reflection at End (Lois Lowry"1946") 
• Student Example 1
• Student Example 2
• Box and Bullets Student Example

Identity Project

It is time to start putting your piece together.

Tips
Can you divide your piece into SCENES?
Are you using a variety of different structural moves to build your scenes?
Are you using various transition techniques to go between scenes?
Are you using imagery in your piece or other craft moves?

Mentor

Possible Structure Moves

H/W - You should have at least 50% of the scenes written for tomorrow's class.

We will do intro and conclusion Thursday.

Claims and Outlining

Root of the Week - Mal

H/W - You should have your claim and outline ready for Tuesday.Part V of outline

Optional: Some of you may have even started organizing your scenes.
Identity Unit: Outline

How good is your claim?

Identity Project - Claims - Drop your claims in here once they are completed. Highlight the KEY ideas in your claim that you will develop in your piece. (see example)

Optional - Watch this video as a very strong example from last year.



DUE DATE for IDENTITY PROJECT is FRIDAY Oct 2nd

Identity Project - Summative Assessment

Planning template: 

• “Generating Ideas for Identity Unit Claims”

Fin

H/W

You need your CLAIM for Monday - You are welcome to start thinking out your outline if you choose.

Online Identity

My Online Identity

Can you maintain a growth mindset across all your work?

H/W

• Copy the link to your 'Unseen Influences' (Where I'm From poem) here under your name. Where I'm From -Link
• Spend 15-20mins working on your 'online identity' artwork. e.g.

All Classes
Compulsory H/W Read Michelle's VERY powerful piece.  Write a comment about a line or phrase that stood out to you.

Maybe the question is not who we are, but who we are meant to be.

          I stared all the blank screen, my mind silenced as if there was a wad of cotton stuck there. It muted everything, the bright lights of the classroom, the already almost-inaudible whisper of my classmates, even my own thoughts seemed far away, as if I was suddenly trapped in a imperceptible, yet indestructible glass box.

          Unfortunately, it was also not helping me get my work done. My eyes bore into the page, but I couldn’t stay that way for long - my vision became unfocused, like a camera zooming in for the perfect shot.

          NO IDEAS.

          NO IDEAS.

          NO IDEAS.

          I kept gawking at the screen, but my mind had travelled far already, three years, to be exact. My eyes stayed on the blank page, but if anyone had asked, I was seeing China, I was in China, in 2012, meeting the gaze of an unknown stranger on the street. I already knew what was going to happen, but I could tear my eyes away, couldn’t not see what was about to occur. Two words replayed themselves, writing themselves all over my mind, like a blackboard overcrowded with the same two words over and over again. They burnt themselves into my skin, etched themselves into my heart.

          混血儿. Mixed blood.

          It wasn’t even the words. It was the way she spat them at me, like something poisonous she wanted to get off her tongue before it infected her. Like I was something poisonous that would infect her.

          Yes, I was definitely mixed, my eyes, my nose, my mouth, all not quite Asian, but not quite European either.

          Sometimes, the Chinese part of me shows. The part that likes to have steaming hot dumplings on a cold winter’s day, the steam a white mist billowing out, a heavenly scent enveloping me like a warm blanket. The part that focuses on studying, furiously scribbling away at math homework, determined to understand. The part that speaks chinese in China, and ignores it when people stare at me strangely. After all, I don’t look Chinese.

          Sometimes, the European part of me shows. The part that loves to eat lasagne so hot it burns my mouth, and top it off with a creamy panna cotta that melts on the tip of my tongue, all the while watching a rich summer sunset from my porch, the kind that has so many colors that it’s almost too bright to look at - the crimsons, scarlets, tangerines, lavenders, violets, and golds blending to make a strange new color, maybe one with an exotic name like rêve, or speranza, or merveille, or maybe langueur. The part that isn’t afraid to be different, to wear strange mismatched socks or a sweater in summer. The part that can’t speak German, and ignores it when people stare at me strangely - like I’m an outsider. After all, I don’t look Swiss.

         Sometimes, the American part of me shows. The part that craves sizzling bacon from right off the pan, and a sunny-side-up egg as well, with a extra large Sprite and a cookie to wash it all down in the busy mornings when I rush to get ready for school, and sprinting for the bus when I’m late, backpack thumping against my back. The part that covets music, and always has her earphones with her, be it in her pocket or in her backpack, ever ready to pull them out in times of need. The part that people ask where she is from, and she isn’t sure whether to say American, Chinese, or European.

         After all, I don’t look like any of them.

        But sometimes, things aren’t what they seem, like a slightly bruised apple - the inside is just as whole as a unmarked one.

Can I Change?

Lesson Recap:

H/W

Are you doing 5-10mins of Membean two - three nights per week?

Reminder: At least 3 verses of your poem needed for Tuesday. 

Really worth watching!!!

Coming in tomorrow's lesson

For Wednesday: Set your 'Can I Change' in motion  (Bring a printed copy of your share with your goal listed.)

Enjoy Mark's beautiful piece of imagery writing. How does yours compare?

Flying over the sea on my way back home I look out the window and look at the clouds and their shapes. I look down to see the dark blue sea as it brings back memories of the salty smell and the crash of the waves rolling in Hawaii. The thought drifts me into thinking about my life and how my life is like a surfer, always picking a different wave. However I always find myself going home, but what I am looking for is not really there. Like when I traveled back to where once was home and expect everything to feel the same. But all my new experiences changed my interests and my opinions about different things. What used to be *Cool* was now just another building in the city. Sometimes my life still can feel like a lost toy under a bed and other times it can be like a fish out of water running out of hope. Particularly when we moved and I had to give up all my friends for a new experience.  I didn’t know what that experience would be like.   Depressing?  Miserable? Saddened?

But that never stopped me because I know on the inside everyone is like a handmade clay pot all attempted to be a vase but unique in their own special way. I am the only me and my layers add up. My shell might be different but my yoke is still the same.  In truth I have learned my home is the sky traveling from place to place. All the countries I have been to and all the places I want to go.  The fish out of water can have help to go back in. For Example my troubles in school or friends that move away while I am still here. I can make new ones and I can get help. My lost life can always be found. Time will show how the layers won’t be the same. But they will still line up to show layer after layer you’re not common you have, different moods and actions. Everyone has their own dents in the clay but everyone will find their sparkle along the way.  I will always remember the time back in first grade when I learned how to swim and tried to be great. When I was about to give up I pulled what was left in me to make it great, and this will stick with me for the rest of my life because it's my talent and even if it's just a hobby It's still meaningful to me. When tasks get difficult like I have never seen, I know I will solve them in the same way.  Even in the future I will make it through. Traveling is normal. Staying in one place is for long is unusual to me. One day however, I will find a place to be and stay, a place I can call home.

Membean - Trained Minutes

How does your Membean practice time compare with your classmates?  What goals could you set for yourself?

Where I'm From

brainstorming chart.

All Classes
You need 3 verses of your poem by next Tue

C/D and E/F classes
WARNING - There are still quite a few people that didnot turn in their imagery writing.
You will get a writing craft grade for your use of 'imagery' Copy/paste your paragraphs here

Imagery

Summative Test: Parts of Speech

H/W - C/D and E/F class
Turn in your piece of writing for tomorrow. Spend 15-20mins on it. (if you have two good scenes that contain 'imagery' that is enough. The piece does not have to be completed thoroughly.)  You will get a writing craft grade for your use of 'imagery' Copy/paste your paragraphs here

Level 3 - Using imagery

Level 4 - Using imagery in context

Identity: Summative 1 Feedback

Make a copy of this file

I am a TCK

For my HB - Win +2 if you can share your biggest take-away from today's chat in HB

Root of the Week: Mort - Death

Grammar

Parts of Speech - Pretest


Today's Mentor Text - The return

Slideshow - Make a copy of this slide. When you finish inserting your images, screenshot your slide and put it into your digital notebook

H/W - You must have your images collected for tomorrow's session. We will do the writing in tomorrow's class.