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Monday, December 14, 2009

Poetry - Showing not Telling

You next poem will be a figurative/sensory narrative poem that retells a major world event in 'showing not telling' language. Monday's H/W will be to select that event.

Use your social studies textbook to select a major event of the 19th, 20th or 21st Century.   More adventurous students can choose to select a topic from the links below.
http://www.awesomestories.com/featured-stories
http://history1900s.about.com/od/famouscrimesscandals/u/events.htm

All you need for Tuesday's class is the name of the event and a print out of the text you will use for your poem. see below
e.g.The Titanic Sinks!



The RMS Titanic, also known as the Unsinkable Ship, set sail on her maiden voyage on April 10, 1912. It was leaving Southampton, England to reach New York. This ship was the biggest ship ever and was created by White Star Lines and was constructed by Harland & Wolff. On April 14 a terrible disaster happened. The Titanic hit an iceburg. It was 11:40pm when she grazed the side of the iceburg. Three hours later it sank. Over 1,500 people died on that fatal night. The captain, Edward J. Smith ignored warnings from other ships about iceburg sightings. They tried to turn the ship so it would not hit the iceburg. They turned but not enough. The ship started to sink at bow, making the passangers move to the stern. She split in two and sank bringing everyone in the water down too. Many froze in the -28 degrees Fahrenheit water. About 706 people survived, living to tell this tragic tale.

Remember
The easiest way to do this is to just select a story from your Social Studies Textbook

80 comments:

Anonymous said...

Thanks Mr. B! That was really helpful!!
Abigail

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Maddie Weber said...

can we do pompeii? the reason that i'm asking is because a lot of people died, so i didn't know if it was too grewsome or not.

Maddie Weber said...
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Ansley said...

Mr. Buxton,
What is a mack. It was in the Beatle's song Penny Lane. In the sentence, it said,"And the banker never wears a mack."
Please Help!

Ansley:)

Ansley said...

Additionally,
Are we going to do a poem like we did in class, or one like you posted on the blog.

Thanks again,
Ansley

Unknown said...

i don't know if we can do this but...could you do one on santa clause?

Beecy

Juliana said...

Mr. Buxton,
Is the Chernoboyl Nuclear Accident good for the event?

~Juliana

Unknown said...

mack is short for mackintosh which is a type of raincoat

Maddie Weber said...

I dont think so MC, because Santa is more of a legend then a historical event

Maddie

Unknown said...

MC, also santa isn't a historical EVENT

®¥@₦ $. said...

I AM STILL KIND OF CONFUSED ON WHAT WE SHOULD WRITE FOR OUR P2'S ON THE SONG. I KNOW WHAT TO DO, BUT I DON'T KNOW WHAT TO WRITE FOR OUR P2'S


RyAn S.

CarolineMackey said...

Can we do the titanic?? my mom suggested that...

®¥@₦ $. said...

I MEAN DO WE WRITE A LINE FROM THE SONG OR DO WE SAY LIKE THIS SONG HAS LINES ABOUT THIS ETC.



RyAn S.

®¥@₦ $. said...

CAROLINE- LOOK ON THE FRONT PAGE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


RyAn S.

Unknown said...

Ryan, for the power 2 you wouldn't write a line from the song you would be like the author talks about.......
Also Caroline I don't think you should do the
Titanic since he posted it up for an example

®¥@₦ $. said...

HE SAID WE COULD DO IT



RyAn S.

Maddie Weber said...

do we hava spanish test 2morrow????!! if so could u PLEASE spost the notes on the blog because I didn't know until now!! sorry for the inconvinous

Maddie

Unknown said...

Do what ?

Unknown said...

Maddie, I don't know if we're having a Spanish test Idon't think we are

Hayden said...

Maddie- No, Mrs. McGlone THINKS we have a test on Fri., but she doesn't know that spanish is in the middle of the holiday sing.
~hayden

Unknown said...

If we are at least you won't be the only one

Alex said...

I already know what my song means, can I still do it?
Alex

®¥@₦ $. said...

I AM CONFUSED WHAT ARE YOU GUYS TALKING ABOUT???????!!!!!!!,,,,,,,,..........



RyAn S.

NJM said...

Does anyone know if we have to type up something for the topic paper if it is in our S.S. textbook?
-Nia

Hayden said...

Nia-no
Alex- you can still do it. I reasearched my song to get a better meaning by it. When i reasearched, i found out thta the song was inspired by a type of drug.

Unknown said...

Ansley... British slang for...a raincoat

the poem will be like we did in class on A.Frank

No..MC we are doing that this week

Juliana yes
Pompeii is fine

P2 are your opinions Ryan..(it s exaclty the same of evaluting text we did at the beg. of the year.) e.g. p2 Regret is a clear meesage the song tries to portray...
then you contine finding p3s that support this idea

Caroline... no... i put that on the blog as an example... you could do another ship

Unknown said...

alex...yes...unless it is clear you are not learning anything...
if you know it all laready you are just wasting your time...spend you energy expanding your knowledge

CarolineMackey said...

Spanish list is...


Hair - el pelo
eyes - el ojo
face - la cara
mouth - la boca
teeth - los dientes
tongue - la lengua
arm - el brazo
finger - el dedo
head - la cabeza
ears - la oreja
nose - la nariz
lips - los labios
hand - la mano
neck - el cuello
chest - el pecho
heart - el corazon
stomach - el estomago
leg - la pierna
toe - el pie

CarolineMackey said...

Mr B


What about the Endurance????

Hayden said...

here is my story and lyrics. Please comment.



Lucy in the sky with diamonds
{VERSE 1}
Picture yourself in a boat on a river,
With tangerine trees and marmalade skies.
Somebody calls you; you answer quite slowly,
A girl with kaleidoscope eyes.

Cellophane flowers of yellow and green,
Towering over your head.
Look for the girl with the sun in her eyes,
And she's gone.

{CHORUS}
Lucy in the sky with diamonds,
Lucy in the sky with diamonds,
Lucy in the sky with diamonds,
Ah... Ah...

{VERSE 2}
Follow her down to a bridge by a fountain,
Where rocking horse people eat marshmallow pies.
Everyone smiles as you drift past the flowers,
That grow so incredibly high.

Newspaper taxis appear on the shore,
Waiting to take you away.
Climb in the back with your head in the clouds,
And you're gone.

{CHORUS}

Picture yourself on a train in a station,
With plasticine porters with looking glass ties.
Suddenly someone is there at the turnstile,
The girl with kaleidoscope eyes.

“Lucy in the Sky with Diamonds”
Lucy in the Sky with Diamonds “The Beatles” is a song that refers to a young girl’s gorgeous characteristics. The author talks about Lucy being in the sky with diamonds. The writer states “The girl with kaleidoscope eyes”, and in my opinion the line refers to the diamonds. The diamonds are possibly signifying that Lucy’s eyes are beautiful. Furthermore, a variety of lines show that the girl doesn’t know Lucy. The writer scribbles “Follow her down to a bridge by a fountain” which describes that someone is not with her, but following Lucy. Additionally, a couple of lines suggest that Lucy knew that the figure was following her. The phrases “Suddenly someone is there at the turnstile, the girl with kaleidoscope eyes” shows that Lucy had to know who the person was if she showed up at the exact place. The line shows that Lucy is clever if Lucy knows that like someone is following her. To reiterate, Lucy is a girl that provides flawless characteristics like a diamond, and she is very intelligent. “The girl with kaleidoscope eyes”.

By: Hayden
Hunley

Alex said...

In My Life





There are places I remember
All my life though some have changed
Some forever not for better
Some have gone and some remain
All these places had their moments
With lovers and friends I still can recall
Some are dead and some are living
In my life I've loved them all

But of all these friends and lovers
There is no one that compares with you
And these memories lose their meaning
When I think of love as something new
Though I know I'll never lose affection
For people and things that went before
I know I'll often stop and think about them
But in my life I love you more

Though I know I'll never lose affection
For people and things that went before
I know I'll often stop and think about them
In my life I love you more
In my life I love you more

In My Life





There are places I remember
All my life though some have changed
Some forever not for better
Some have gone and some remain
All these places had their moments
With lovers and friends I still can recall
Some are dead and some are living
In my life I've loved them all

But of all these friends and lovers
There is no one that compares with you
And these memories lose their meaning
When I think of love as something new
Though I know I'll never lose affection
For people and things that went before
I know I'll often stop and think about them
But in my life I love you more

Though I know I'll never lose affection
For people and things that went before
I know I'll often stop and think about them
In my life I love you more
In my life I love you more

is this good or do I need less pronouns?

Thanks, Alex

Juliana said...

Thanks, Mr. Buxton! Maddie, if you do have Spanish tomorrow then I'm pretty sure you have the test because our class does.

~Juliana :-)

Alex said...

I copied the wrong one so ignore my last comment
Alex

Unknown said...

alex, you seem to have just copied the lyrics.. there is no evaluation of the song from what i can read
Read Hayden's to get the idea

JACKSONH said...

Mr. B!!!!!

Can we do the song on one page and the writing on the other??

JaCkSoN HuFfMaN

JACKSONH said...

I'm talking about the Beatles song.

Unknown said...

make the font smaller Jackson...save the trees!

JACKSONH said...

You can't unless. Well, if you do it looks really wierd.
J

JACKSONH said...

You can't unless you make mare lines on one line

Unknown said...

Hayde when you say "The author talks about Lucy being in the sky with diamonds" I think thats being to literal

Forrester said...

May we write our paragraph?

Forrester said...

May we write our paragraph on the back of our lyrics?

Unknown said...

Forrester- Mr. B prefers you to type it but writing it would still be okay i guess

CarolineMackey said...

Can I do the Endurance?


Caroline

Forrester said...

Caroline- I don't know what the Endurance was, but if it is a historical event, you can do it

Juliana said...

Are we supposed to put the evaluating Beatles song in paragraphs?

~Juliana

JACKSONH said...

What would be a good second sentence for the Beatles thing?????

Right now, mine is:Yellow Submarine by the Beatles shows how a man sailed to sea telling about his adventure.

Forrester said...

Juliana- I would just do one paragraph.

Anonymous said...

Yes Forester. YOu're right
Abigail

Mary Grace Parker said...

My song is Let it Be, and I think it is about them talking about the Veitnam War.... would that be good? -M.G.

Hayden said...

any song is good M.G

Mary Grace Parker said...

No, what I THINK

Mary Grace Parker said...

Are we spoused to have 3 P2's and 3 P3's?

Unknown said...

ok...i found someone else...thank you soooo much

Hayden said...

the setting is suppose to be 12323231.
~hayden

Maddie Weber said...

I am using parts of my beatles song to elaborate on my power 3s is that what we r supposed to do???

Maddie

Maddie Weber said...

I'm sort of lost!!! :( I have my power threes and i elaborated on them but i don't know how to elaborate on my power threes, and my paragraph is all messed up this is what I have so far PLEASE COMMENT!!!!
The long and winding road that leads to your door,
Will never disappear, I've seen that road before
It always leads me here, lead me to your door.

The wild and windy night that the rain washed away,
Has left a pool of tears crying for the day.
Why leave me standing here, let me know the way.

Many times I've been alone and many times I've cried,
Anyway you've always known the many ways I've tried, but
Still they lead me back to the long, winding road,

You left me waiting here a long, long time ago.
Don't leave me standing here, lead me to your door.
Da da, da da


My Interpretation

“Lead me to your door”
The lyrics ‘ the long winding road’ by the Beetles is
a powerful song that expresses a feeling a person has for a girl and the person wants to know more about her life and be a part of it. I can infer this because a multitude of times, a long, winding road comes across as a person’s life’s story. I predict that this man had known this girl for quite a while and not realized that he had feelings for the girl, and I can infer this because in a passage it expresses it ‘The wild and windy night that the rain washed away,
Has left a pool of tears crying for the day.
Why leave me standing here, let me know the way.’ I strongly state that I predict the girl doesn’t like him back, because it

Mary Grace Parker said...

Yeah, using parts of your song is great.

-M.G.

Mary Grace Parker said...

The prediction part is good, but you probaly want to make your p2's and p3's better.

-M.G.

Mary Grace Parker said...

You don't have a concluison sentence or closing hook.

-M.G.

®¥@₦ $. said...

alex- all you did was write the lyrics twice



RyAn S.

Hayden said...

please comment. My event is the Prince William earthquake in Prince William, Alaska. Enjoy!!!!!!


Blind Eyes
Streets bustle and hustle like army camps
Rickety buildings seem sturdy enough
Water drips down from the disappearing icicles
Just another molecule in a large ball

Light but dark pounds the street
Cracks appear in souls and grounds
Slowly the molecule is split throughout
Anchorage is rapidly losing the title bout

Growling stones come crashing down
The clouds rumble like thunder now
Hopping down cliffs like bunnies
The rocks are not so sunny

Silence is heard throughout the city
Alaska is now not so pretty
Dreams are broken in an instant
The token to happiness is suddenly gone

®¥@₦ $. said...

HAYDEN- AWESOME!!!!!?????,,,,,..... I LIKE IT!!!!!?????,,,,,.....


PLEASE EAT MINE AND TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK. ENJOY!!!!!?????,,,,,.....




John F. Kennedy Assassination

Small earthquakes marching behind,
Smoke floating out in line.
Constant screaming with engines running,
Fast motors, but no sprinting.

A variety of people yelling with joy,
Very breakable, and not a small toy.
Numerous citizens thinking they’re safe
A loud “BANG”, yet not a small chafe.

Three more ”BOOMS”, all hitting their targets,
All of the nation heard, even the markets.
Everybody worried that they would be the victims,
Hoping that the assassin would go to prison.

Tears streaming down everyone’s face,
All the president wanted to do was help the human race.
Too much chaos was happening everywhere,
The man’s family was in so much despair.

Hayden said...

Ryan- that is really good except you need a stronger ending.

Juliana said...

Hayden, don't forget to sign your name after your comment because CP3 #1 is not your name.

~Juliana

Unknown said...

Hindenburg diaster, please comment

Heading into history
Will Gardner

May 6, 1937
A helium structure heading towards history
Anxiety burned throughout the air
The hustle and bustle of New Jersey surrounded the town

Blue discharges started it all
Gas leaked like rainfall
A “mushroom” smacked the unsuspecting clouds
As screams, cries, and shouts showered the ground

“Its burst into flames” Herbert Morrison wailed
“Get out of the way, please” Herbert quickly exhaled
Metal candlesticks poured down with a whoosh
When the “Titanic of the sky” descended with its final tries

The smell of soot hit the city folk
As the taste of pity rose in their throats
“Oh the humanity” came from above
When the “Led balloon” came down like a sad grey dove

Juliana said...

That's amazing Will! But I don't think you need so many quotations.

~Juliana

Unknown said...

Thanks Juliana

Unknown said...

Please comment and guess what my event is
the bitter air blew
the wind howled like a ird that flew
a leader of civil rights marcked with hope
unaware of the future in which people would cope
the blazing sun died down
twinkling light appered in the town
he led people in deshaveled clothes
dow the trash filled alleys marching with his head held high
the noble peace prize winner drove back to town
this is where he would meet his end
for others in was a time of less sin
the day was april 4 1968
out on the cement balcony he went
but it was to late
a shot rang out
he dropped to the floor
his times of troubles would be no more

Unknown said...

sorry about the spelling

®¥@₦ $. said...

who is swlbla



RyAn S.

®¥@₦ $. said...

oh

Hayden said...

Sabrina-the describtion sounds like the assasination of abraham lincoln, but the date is the assasination of J.F.K.

Hayden said...

SORRY SABRINA. I FORGOT ABOUT MARTIN LUTHER KING JR.

Unknown said...

it's ok

Unknown said...

It is MLK jr.

Unknown said...

Mr.B this is brinning me down some

Hayden said...

why?

Mary Grace Parker said...

I just read yours Will; it's REALLY good!

-M.G.

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