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Wednesday, November 17, 2010

Showing Not Telling Competition - comments welcomed

By Bennett and Sophie Smith


The pioneers, Scott and Janis, stand as still as obedient soldiers. The skinny old man has as many wrinkles as an old oak tree. Janie’s blond hair shimmers in the graceful sunlight. Her dotted dress matches the beautiful curtains in their three story house. Beads of sweat trickled down Scott’s face after he had filled barrels with hay from the barn. Janie’s eye’s were as blue as the cloudless sky. Their solemn faces and dragging feet showed their unhappiness. A fragrant smell of burning wax filled the air.


By Lilly and Adit


The farmers, Robert and Beth, were staring diligently at their detached farm. With their hands shaking and their knees stuttering, the farmers tried to fight back their tears. The warm misty air was trying to recover from the devastating act that had just happened in the fields. The blazing hot fire had covered all one hundred acres of the land that they owned.

28 comments:

Liza said...

I thought bennet and sophie were very disciptive as well as using figuretive languge, compound and complex sentences, and SSS teqnics.

Unknown said...

Wow. Liza... That was quick. I haven't even left school yet.

Liza said...

I also felt that lilly and adit did a great use of Showing not Telling.

Sophie Hardy said...

do i need to do any work that i missed? and wichnis the time shift page?

Anonymous said...

Sophie, the time shift page is in our showing not telling booklet.

Beck said...

both of those pieces of writing are really good. u guys did a nice job of "showing, not telling". i really like them.

Beck said...

Mr. Buxton-
the Robert Fulton movie only has about 45 sec. on Fulton then moves to other topics. are there any more videos on him?

kennedy said...

kennedy- For h/w do we have anything else than our 2 paces for time shifts, and our southesat region famous person? I thought Lilly and Adit did a fabulos job of showing not telling and figuritive language. the same thing goes with sophie and bennet's piece of writing too.

kennedy said...

kennedy- where do you find the movies on our famous people?

adit said...

The word bank can really help you for your work. Especially, when you need help to describe emotions or feeling that the person can feel.

adit said...

Kennedy, you could look at the blog archive.

martha said...

kennedy, we have pages in our packet, southeast region person, math, and if you haven't done your ocean flip book it is due tomorrow.

Sophie Hardy said...

yes but what page is it?

martha said...

The time shift page it is near the back of the packet. I can't be more specific than that because the pages are not numbered.

Unknown said...

sophie, the time shift page says ''time shift page h/w''and then also the back of that sheet - gg

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Lauren said...

IN our narritive, is it historical fiction??? can we expand on the basic idea, or do we just have to stick to the facts............

Unknown said...

lauren, mr. buxton said that we have to use facts but u can also made up stuff

Unknown said...

where r the videos on our people????????????

Unknown said...

Beck - Sorry, that was the best i could find. You will just have to use the websites for information on him

Lauren - Great question. It IS histroical 'fiction'. You can expand, adapt, invent some of the information but yu must get at least 'some' true facts into the piece as well

Lauren said...

ok thank you mr. buxton for answering my question

Matigan said...

Our H/W sheet says "Figurative and Sensory Languege Activity. Watch the videos on the blog and finish the worksheet." Is the worksheet our Narrative worksheet or another worksheet?????

Unknown said...

matigan - that was the exercise we switched to Monday night

Lauren said...

matigan, that is the hw that we did last night remember??? Mr.Buxton filped the hw around.
tonights hw is monday nights hw.

Gauruv Singh said...

Mattigan, Mr. Buxton said that you have to do the time shift sentences in your Southeast Regions booklet, and you would want to fill up your power plan for your narrative on you famous guy...... in your southeast regions booklet

Matigan said...

Thanks guys!!!

Beck said...

Mr. Buxton,
For the Narrative Writing, is about 6 sentences enough? that is as much as i typed in computer class.

Beck said...

oh, yeah, mr. buxton, one more thing,what do u call "finishing 2 note cards" that we did in class today

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