Due Dates

E/F & C/D - Your PRINTED version of your paper is due FRI.

• An engaging title: Try Title Generator
• Correctly inserted images acceptable
• Name. 1.5 line spacing
• All colors removed
• Final advice - Read your paper to a parent -They can offer an opinion and suggestion 1 change.

G/H -  Due Tues

Paragraph order: Reminder
Intro.
Support 1
Support 2
Support 3 (optional)
Counter
Conclusion

Proof Reading Tips

1) Be precise with verb choice in quote sandwiches.
Does the evidence: indicate, proof, demonstrate, suggest, illustrate, reveal, argue?

2) Find out how many times you are referencing your 'thesis/claim' - Minimum x5

3) Remove most pronouns: You, We , I, It, They

4) Capitalize proper Nouns: The Hurvery Study 1985

6) Grammar Integration: Parallel Structure, Repeated and Double Comparatives,  Superlatives

5) Use Vocaroo to listen for fluency. Recite one paragraph at a time.



Audio recording >> Coming Tomorrow: Vlog - How will your creativity compare with this?

Concluding Paragraph

Membean Assessment tomorrow - Make sure you know the roots that you have met. These questions might trip you up. All these roots are individual based on your progress and are on your dashboard. e.g. see below

Students mentioned below are recommended to do an extra 10 mins of practice tonight:

 Kira Sehgal, Lukas Daniel-Pedersen, Samuel Bodden, Sonia Kingsley.   The Membean system requires recent practice. 

10 minutes of additional practice is suggested for everybody as a refresher ( especially if you didn't practice after Monday night) Optional!

Just out of interest: these images show how much time each student has spend studying Membean this week. The most at the top. The least at the bottom. Of course,  I am to going to say whose name the charts go with, but where do you think you are? E/F class - David - yours is at the top for the most studying!!! Well done!

E/F

C/D Yasmin - you are at the top for your class for time spent studying...Bravo

Today, we learned some steps in order to create a strong close to our essays.

Use these steps to write your concluding paragraph.

Mentor: Claim - Middle students need to learn to use better listening skills during instructional sessions

Key point: Don’t use to CONCLUDE - anywhere else in your piece!

1) Transitional (To summarize, In closing, Clearly, Without question)

2) Restated thesis (said in different words

3) BEST two or three researched facts said differently - Make it clear that you are representing the data using 'referencing' phraseology

3b) Optional - Revisit an anecdote - close the story

4) Call to action  (Tell your audience critics or supporters to do something!)

5) Prognosticating (You get what you want - what changes?)

To reiterate, for consistent and long lasting academic progress to occur, 7th grade students need to learn and consistently implement effective listening skills during instructional sessions.  A poll of 300 teachers showed that almost 90% of these educators always provide verbal clues to test content during their teaching. Moreover, the  findings of the Burton survey, ‘Skills for the 21st Century’ showed that  being an effective listening has the single most impact on academic performance. Stories like  Mary Jones experience will cease to exist if students learn to become active and not passive listeners in school. The next time a student in a classroom is being disruptive, off task, or simply not paying attention to the instructional material, this individual should be politely redirected and reminded of his learning responsibilities. Who knows? Perhaps a time will come in the future when a visitor to any forward thinking school can wander into any classroom and see only engaged, attentive well focused students involved in learning.

Why no green?

Put your conclusions in the file (see Monday's post) for inspection.

FINAL PIECE: Due Friday
G/H - Yours will be due - Next Monday.

Introduction: Reteach

Can you name the different section of this introduction? Could you color code your own piece in the same way?

Nine year old Mary Swanson is excited to return home from school and watch T.V. Sadly, on whichever channel she tunes into she is instantly pummelled with a barrage of commercials promoting toys with fast food products or even advertisements pitching violent video games like Call of Duty. This type of forced indoctrination has to stop. Even though advocates of advertising on T.V. might argue that this bustling industry supports the U.S. economy, a law should still exist that prohibits television commercials that directly target young children.  School aged children are simple too young to make informed decisions about the merits of different products in advertisements. More often than not,  even unhealthy foods and are often manipulated into situations that directly seek to influence children through seemingly innocent advertisements.

C/D & E/F

Tonight your task is to finish writing your counterargument and put into yesterday's file to be graded! (link is in yesterday's post)

Mentor counterargument: Can you see what the different colors represent?

Proponents of the current status quo on advertising argue quite loudly that this industry creates over 10million jobs across the nation.  Their stance is quite logical. Effective advertising leads to profitable  businesses; profitable businesses lead to more jobs, and more jobs lead to  a healthy successful economy. While engaging, their reasoning is categorically flawed. Do  the benefits they state outweigh the pitfalls? The APA estimates that advertisers may spend more than $12 billion per year on ads created to pull in the youth market. Because young children do not understand the actions of advertisers, they will eat the fatty foods without knowing these products could harm them. Therefore in fact, advertising leads to poorer health and poorer health leads to a greater demand on the countries health care system; thus adversely affecting the economy.  The U.S. Healthy Ministry said in 2012 $40 billion dollars in taxpayer money went to fight obesity related illnesses.  The costs simply do not balance out. Clearly,  manipulating, influencing, and persuading students  to eat unhealthy food is wrong.  Advertisements targeting young children has to stop.


Final Rubric: For your reference
C/D & E/F - Final pieces due Friday!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Final Stretch

Types of Opening

1) Rhetorical Question: Is individual choice stifled across America because of mandatory school uniform policies?  (often parallel structure is used here)  

2) Create a scenario:  Picture this. It's a typical Monday morning in suburbia. Two very opinionated tweens are each squabbling over a pair of Feline pants. Each is desperate to wear them at school in order to look cool.  

3) Tell a SHORT anecdote:  Mary Jane Roe walked nervously down the halls of Shane Elementary. After no more that a few steps, the giggles began soon followed by a barrage of   insults. Mary Jane was wearing Wrangler jeans, and this style was simply not cool

Anybody can write an opening: The trick is CONNECTING the  opening  (hook) to your claim/thesis - see how these sentences below relate to the hooks

Example 1)  Answer the question  by referring to the claim e.g. Clearly, the is a dire need to  protect the freedoms of self expression before they become eroded.(state claim)

Example 2) Families around the country can avoid these sibling squabbles if ….(state claim)

Example 3) Sadly, this story is repeated across America. This behavior can only be changed if….(state claim)

EVERYBODY
You must copy and paste your introduction into this file for grading You will receive an error analysis report  and a grade for this piece. The due dates for the other sections of your essay are below with the files attached. By giving you 'process' grades, you have the opportunity to improve before turning in the final paper.

Due: Tue -  Your Introduction
Due: Wed - Your counterargument
Due: Thur: - Your conclusion
Make sure you 'personally' read your supporting paragraphs against the criteria I used for your last graded supporting paragraph grade.
Due: Fri: - Finished piece

C/D & E/F

You should have done 15mins on Membean between last Thurs. & tomorrow.

Comment: You must write a comment based on what you, 'saw, thought, or wondered' about the Invictus so far.

Ubuntu

Ubuntu "I am who I am because of who we all are." Remembering a great leader...

The poem that has come to symbolize Mandala's legacy

Research Based Essay: Officially, I expected finished pieces in during next Friday's class. This is over 3 more hours of class time. - If your progress to date means that you will not meet this deadline, they you need to increase your H/W load!

Next Thur: First Membean assessment - You do not need to study for this. Just make sure you have practiced using the software.